After talking to a very helpful John P. McCann, I've decided to start from the bottom, and work my way up.
Here is a sample log line:
"When the director of a traveling show wants to make it big in america, he must first confront his slightly depressing past with the opposing show who will stop at nothing to shut them down."
Just a test, many more will come in the next few days.
So, here is my next attempt on a full summary, using a sort of 'checklist'
1.Who are the characters?
Short Answer-The members of a traveling show
Long Answer-They are the three members of an american traveling show. The Director of the group is Chuck Fesant; An old timer who is as sharp as a tack when it comes to entertainment, and wants to bring back the spirit of performance, and clever writing back to america. Rutherferd; the show's main actor (Note, the group has several actors, but i'm just talking about the main characters), a sly, smart, witty, high spirited rabbit who wants nothing more than to please everyone around him, but sometimes tries too hard. Linda; the main writer for the show, a very focused rabbit who takes a lot of pride in her work, and doesn't like to put up with nonsense, but somehow, wound up in a group with Rutherferd.
2.What do they want?
To make it big in america
3.What stops them from getting it?
A competing traveling show, also the heads of a major movie studio, has a past with Chuck Fesant.
4.Who are these characters to each other?
Rutherferd and Linda went to college together, they were originally are from London, but moved to america when they wanted to start a show, which is how they met chuck who was a retired director and wanted to get back in directing, story and sketch writing so he tagged along with them.
A short, and better approach then my previous posts. In the next few days, or months, i have to get them back from a friend of mind, I'll post a treatment of my first episode. It explains a little bit better the relationship between the main characters, and i don't want to give too much away now, so i'll try to have them up soon.
Sunday, May 30, 2010
Monday, May 24, 2010
Review, and redo.
After reading back over my post, particularly my past one, I've decided that better explanation is needed. During the past few days, I've reorganized the concept, and cleaned up some of the details.
Beginning with the characters, and humor. The humor in the show is derived from many things, but my favorite parts are the exaggerated, sometimes stereotypical personalities. The ironic situations help the characters play off of each other. And that helps add to the emotions and motives of the characters. I've also thought that the two main characters, Rutherferd and Linda may not end up being rabbits. They'll be some creature, but I'm not exactly sure what. Next, our other main character, Chuck. Chuck, the director in the show, is layed back, serious, and sometimes high strong and short tempered. He knows what he wants and desires but is also sacrificial to others, adding to the connection of viewers to the characters. Chuck is creative, but wish washy, often changing the scripts and story, even in the middle of shooting. This then produces comedy consisting of Rutherford versus Chuck.
Which brings me to my next point, Rutherford. Rutherford went to college with Linda. So he has always known her. The point of Rutherford was to create a funny man that universally annoys and plays off of everyone. He is literal, and has a short attention spand, But, he isn't dumb either. When Rutherferd needs to be, he can be cunning and sly (and quite often witty) Ironicaly though he doesn't always mean to be. He is happy, almost always, an optimist one might say. He's quiet, most of the time, unless spoken to, or when he's acting. Rutherferd has his caring side, when he ralizes what he's done wrong, he wants to apologize, but then he plays a joke on them imediately after, and the person he conflicts with gets frustrated and angry, for comedic relief of course.
Consider this part one of a slightly improved summary. If you have any questions, comments, or just want to talk to me for whatever reason, email me at lbrown21494@gmail.com, lbrown21494@yahoo.com, or, better yet, IM me at, yep you guessed it, lbrown21494 on AIM.
Please keep in mind that my archived stories and concepts aren't near as jumbled, and unorganized as they appear. I post these from my iPod, making really uncomftorable to focus on what I'm typing, I make imstakes sometimes, and things turn out like a ramble. So, before I go on much longer, addios,
contact me please.
Beginning with the characters, and humor. The humor in the show is derived from many things, but my favorite parts are the exaggerated, sometimes stereotypical personalities. The ironic situations help the characters play off of each other. And that helps add to the emotions and motives of the characters. I've also thought that the two main characters, Rutherferd and Linda may not end up being rabbits. They'll be some creature, but I'm not exactly sure what. Next, our other main character, Chuck. Chuck, the director in the show, is layed back, serious, and sometimes high strong and short tempered. He knows what he wants and desires but is also sacrificial to others, adding to the connection of viewers to the characters. Chuck is creative, but wish washy, often changing the scripts and story, even in the middle of shooting. This then produces comedy consisting of Rutherford versus Chuck.
Which brings me to my next point, Rutherford. Rutherford went to college with Linda. So he has always known her. The point of Rutherford was to create a funny man that universally annoys and plays off of everyone. He is literal, and has a short attention spand, But, he isn't dumb either. When Rutherferd needs to be, he can be cunning and sly (and quite often witty) Ironicaly though he doesn't always mean to be. He is happy, almost always, an optimist one might say. He's quiet, most of the time, unless spoken to, or when he's acting. Rutherferd has his caring side, when he ralizes what he's done wrong, he wants to apologize, but then he plays a joke on them imediately after, and the person he conflicts with gets frustrated and angry, for comedic relief of course.
Consider this part one of a slightly improved summary. If you have any questions, comments, or just want to talk to me for whatever reason, email me at lbrown21494@gmail.com, lbrown21494@yahoo.com, or, better yet, IM me at, yep you guessed it, lbrown21494 on AIM.
Please keep in mind that my archived stories and concepts aren't near as jumbled, and unorganized as they appear. I post these from my iPod, making really uncomftorable to focus on what I'm typing, I make imstakes sometimes, and things turn out like a ramble. So, before I go on much longer, addios,
contact me please.
Friday, May 21, 2010
Humor
I know that the few people that have seen this blog might be thinking that There is simply too much depth for this to be a simple cartoon. Keep in mind that this stuff isn't in your face and that it is as subtle as any other cartoon or story. I have been studying the works of some of the best writers, and animators to help influence how the humor in my show will be. It will be classic, it won't be Politically Correct, but it also won't be mean, dirty, or use cheep writing tricks like cut-aways (Well, only occasionally use cut-aways anyway.) Everything i write i want it to be clean, but not dumbed down. The best comparison i can think of is a show like Animaniacs. The writers never dumbed down their writing for the show and almost never worried about being insensitive. They just wrote whatever they thought was funny, without being secular. I'm not ripping off animaniacs though, but it will have some wit to it. Anyway, enough rambling. The shows humor is based off of slapstick, whit, just classic comedy in general. The situations are absurd, and the characters jump off screen( Keep a net handy).
Monday, May 10, 2010
Story
Concept and Basic Story:
A traveling variety show wants to make it big in America and someday work in Hollywood. They want to leave a major impact on society, just like the golden age of cinema did. Our three main characters include Rutherford Paws, a very hyper active rabbit who happens to be a phenomenal actor, Linda, another rabbit, the writer, and Chuck, the Director(he’s human). Our characters make their rounds all over the country and are at constant war with a rivaling variety show who is in deep connection to our director.
Theme:
The theme in this story is that in order for true art to be made, sacrifices have to be made. There has to be a good balance between the creative mind, social pressure, and publicity. There also seems to be a running theme about trust and greed, and its impact on close groups of friends and even family. Chuck is a very troubled man at heart and has a past with our antagonist. Felix, the main henchman of the antagonist, is in the same predicament. But let us travel back shall we?
Back-story, antagonist/Chuck:
It’s the boom of the talking pictures in the thirties, and there is one national movie sensation, that happens to be the very young version of our antagonist, and chuck. They write the best stuff and are instantly adored by the entire nation, but all this greed goes to the main antagonist’s head. He wants to do anything to make more, and more money, even at the expense of the other members and the quality of their work. So him, and chuck start feuding over values and principle. He and Felix both know what’s right, but Felix is to scared to say anything about it. Everything him and Chuck ever learned about writing, acting, and directing they learned from Garson, the head of the group. Chuck then leaves the group and struggles with his films for a few years, then he made great ones for the remainder of his film career until he settled down and moved to London to become a reporter. Why London? He likes the accents. After about ten years he goes into retirement, until he decides that he’d like to go back to America, direct, and even try to make amends with his group. He reads in a news paper one day, that there will be tryouts for a director’s position as part of a group that is forming a… variety show. So he goes and tries out, and sure enough, he gets the spot. The group now leaves for America, the land of opportunity. In America, they learn of the old variety show’s success, and learn that all cast members are alive and the head of a movie studio. Little does Chuck realize, that the group wants to get revenge back on him and his success.
A traveling variety show wants to make it big in America and someday work in Hollywood. They want to leave a major impact on society, just like the golden age of cinema did. Our three main characters include Rutherford Paws, a very hyper active rabbit who happens to be a phenomenal actor, Linda, another rabbit, the writer, and Chuck, the Director(he’s human). Our characters make their rounds all over the country and are at constant war with a rivaling variety show who is in deep connection to our director.
Theme:
The theme in this story is that in order for true art to be made, sacrifices have to be made. There has to be a good balance between the creative mind, social pressure, and publicity. There also seems to be a running theme about trust and greed, and its impact on close groups of friends and even family. Chuck is a very troubled man at heart and has a past with our antagonist. Felix, the main henchman of the antagonist, is in the same predicament. But let us travel back shall we?
Back-story, antagonist/Chuck:
It’s the boom of the talking pictures in the thirties, and there is one national movie sensation, that happens to be the very young version of our antagonist, and chuck. They write the best stuff and are instantly adored by the entire nation, but all this greed goes to the main antagonist’s head. He wants to do anything to make more, and more money, even at the expense of the other members and the quality of their work. So him, and chuck start feuding over values and principle. He and Felix both know what’s right, but Felix is to scared to say anything about it. Everything him and Chuck ever learned about writing, acting, and directing they learned from Garson, the head of the group. Chuck then leaves the group and struggles with his films for a few years, then he made great ones for the remainder of his film career until he settled down and moved to London to become a reporter. Why London? He likes the accents. After about ten years he goes into retirement, until he decides that he’d like to go back to America, direct, and even try to make amends with his group. He reads in a news paper one day, that there will be tryouts for a director’s position as part of a group that is forming a… variety show. So he goes and tries out, and sure enough, he gets the spot. The group now leaves for America, the land of opportunity. In America, they learn of the old variety show’s success, and learn that all cast members are alive and the head of a movie studio. Little does Chuck realize, that the group wants to get revenge back on him and his success.
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